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Struggling with hell Part II

By, Skateboard

His eyes swarm with evil as his boaming voice wrecked the ground. As shoutedhis voice shook the ground,
Anger in his eyes. his minions were not doing as told actually thinking for themseleves for once. A brainless demon
could not think for them self, so this was an amazing break through. As hell was being raised, Earth was dieing and
few people are living. Here comes a hero to slay the evil beasts and rest hell for the rest of the time.

Lord Thatchen Hellplague was our hero he was aone in a million. Everything and beyond could he do. Cast
spells, And fight off beastes with his sword. Black with his shield, Teleport. Thatchen had destroyed evil before, but
never again for the sky fell on him and he banished forever. People sat whereever he walked light shone, but no one
really saw him.

I was being escorted to the dungeon. Aocolypse was holding me with 1 hand. I was scared to death.longer
and longer we walked it got colder and colder, until apocolypse casta spell and flame grew on the walls like vines.,
my skin was peeling off but as soon as i was transported into the dungeon. I couldnt move. My bones grew together
and feet sank into the ground. I was held by held tightly by restraints i tried to run but they were to strong. The night
seemed to near, but no one could tell fore it was always dark The sky seemed to follow every one around because it
was dark for endless times.

Everyone wished Thatchen would come ans save the world like he did 279 years ago. Until one day he
finally came, Goblins ran but not far before thatchen blew them up with ice bolts. The world was saved but, ould he
beat diablo?


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The following comments are for "Struggling with hell Part II"
by skateboard

this um .. story
i sat and read the creation of words, however i still remain utterly confused. what the fuck just happened? i was lost after the van accident. please skateboard, for all those that don't get what the hell you're tryin to say with this story put it into sentences that ACTUALLY MAKE FRICKIN SENSE!!! thank you.

( Posted by: archer_05 [Member] On: December 27, 2001 )

re: this um

Your review was lacking in taste and finesse, as well as tact. This is not the kind of review we will allow on the site. This is border line on a "you suck" comment. Make your point, don't use cursing in a review, it's not necessary.

Your own punctuation, grammar and spelling leave plenty of room for improvement. I would suggest you give your review more thought int he future. When it doubt, leave it out.

Chrispian H. Burks
Creator / Editor

( Posted by: Chrispian [Admin] On: December 27, 2001 )

Archer Please
Archer, you need to follow the right sequences. i have posted 4 stories so far each 2 of them 1st parts of episodic stories im writing. if you followed the right sequence you would understand the storie more, you read part 1 of strange awakening then part 2 of struggling with hell, 2 diff. names.
...Just a thought before you act out...

( Posted by: Skateboard [Member] On: January 7, 2002 )

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