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Neutral Colours was a child of moderate attractiveness and normal, to the national average, disposition. Neutral lived with Parent and Guardian in their reasonably sized home in central Somewhere. I must mention that position in life does not give an advantage or disadvantage over other people in this or any story, as everyone is equal. Neutral was a happy young adult and lived a pleasant life. Parent was a teacher and Guardian was in between jobs.


Unfortunately, one day Parent was in a traffic accident and died. Guardian entered a perfectly normal state of mourning and it was suggested that a counsellor should be seen to help the recovery process. Neutral continued on at college and helped Guardian at home when given a chance. Other than the loss of Parent life remained the same.


After several months Guardian began to organize life. A part time job and nightly college course were started, it was on this course Guardian met Partner. Guardian and Partner rapidly became good friends and a closer relationship soon followed. After a time Guardian asked Partner to move into the Colours’ home. Sadly there were differences in opinion. Guardian loved Neutral, Partner didn’t. Partner was jealous of Neutral’s moderate attractiveness.


Partner decided that life would be preferable if Neutral were out of the picture. One night when Partner was in a terrible mood a verbal altercation arose between the pair. It was this that caused Neutral to leave home.


Neutral wandered the streets not knowing what to do. However, as Neutral was in an unfit state, (not that I am trying to justify Neutral’s actions,) when confronted with the decision of where to sleep that night, Neutral illegally entered an apartment block. The interior of these homes seemed unusual to Neutral, as objects appeared to be of a different scale. Neutral presumed that the house was in fact a children’s home. Thinking it would do no harm; Neutral fell into a deep sleep on the sofa.


When the homeowners finished work they were deeply upset to find a stranger asleep in their lounge so they rang the police and gave a description of the offender. Neutral stirred and looked at the surrounding group of persons. Neutral realized that this was not a children's home but the dwelling of a group of vertically challenged individuals. The people were angry and demanded to know why Neutral had intruded into their private lives. Neutral broke down and explained the situation. Pitying the stranger the vertically challenged persons decided not to press charges. They did however claim for damages.


Guardian had informed the police instantly when it was realised that Neutral was not coming home, this made it easier for the law enforcers to identify whom the tear away teen was. Riddled with guilt Partner had arranged counselling sessions for the family and weekly ‘Good Parenting’ classes to avoid this kind of family misunderstanding. The trio lived ordinarily ever after.



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The following comments are for "Neutral Colours And A Number Of Vertically Challenged Persons"
by Soph0124

Neutral
Very nice! Experimental fiction like this kicks venerable ass! One qualm, and it is a small one. Your bracketed sentence ("not that I am...") seems to be out of place and awkward. It disrupts the flow, and it makes your narrative strategy less effective. I crave improvisation - thanks for pulling through!

-SD

( Posted by: strangedaze [Member] On: February 23, 2004 )

soph
Hey, this is awesome! I love the way you dealt with the characters withoug dealing with them. =D The developement and storytelling was superb because despite the (intentionally) flat characters and plot you held my interest! Bravo!

Hey, in spirit of the "neutural" should I give this piece a 5? ;)

Take care.

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: February 24, 2004 )

Hi is soph x
This Is the first draft of my story it's my English coursework so I have change some stuff but not much I might update this. Thanx for the comments they really help so if you have commented thank you if you haven't please do sophie x

( Posted by: Soph0124 [Member] On: February 27, 2004 )





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