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A bloody pool
Surrounds her
Naked on the
Cold hard ground.
Her eyes, marble
In their stillness,
And her red red lips,
Painted on,
Like a dead hibiscus.
Her sculpted body
Blue in its decay.
Her nails have known
The dust of Death
And her skin cracked
Like a china vase.
A beautiful goddess…





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Servitas a Periculum

Servatis a Maleficum


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The following comments are for "Post Mortem"
by blightedstar

I dig it
I like the hibiscus, and the comparisons to art, the way we see art as beauty but if you think about it art is cold and lonely and deteriorates.

( Posted by: Joe Quinn [Member] On: February 23, 2004 )

violent!
Wow, you're imagery really grabbed me here. I think my stomach actually churned about halfway through. Good job!

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: February 23, 2004 )

mortem

i liked the title a lot, but the remainder of the poem seemed a bit melodramatic. take or leave at will.

( Posted by: ark [Member] On: February 23, 2004 )





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