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there is no sound
but the failure of the night
to bring a smile
to a quiet face

there is no touch
but unsure hands
parting thick curtains
like morning warm thighs

there is no rain
but God there should be
it makes falling appear beautiful
it makes the stars shy

I'm very ape and very nice

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The following comments are for "hotel room alone"
by Joe Quinn

that was very pretty, i like it

( Posted by: Taylor [Member] On: February 21, 2004 )

waking up
Short and sweet, I like this one...there was one phrase that I was particularly interested in...

"parting thick curtains
like morning warm thighs"

Very nice! =D

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: February 21, 2004 )

I liked the mood you created with this one. I particularly liked the line "but God there should be" part. Nice touch. A 9 from me.


( Posted by: strangedaze [Member] On: February 22, 2004 )

Not promising
The poem is not promising to deliver any content which may lead in general to a reading pleasure.Maybe the length is too short or the concept itself is dry.

( Posted by: RightingIt [Member] On: February 23, 2004 )

I love the last stanza - there is beautiful imagery there! :)

( Posted by: blightedstar [Member] On: February 23, 2004 )

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