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I'm torn between you and death
Death such serenity
You so much life
Both so wonderful both offer happpiness

Death could end my pain
You could try to fight away all of my misery
In your arms I would choose only you
When alone and in fear I would choose death

Nights with you make me feel amazing
Thinking of death at nights make me feel numb
I know choosing you would be right
But the thought of death lingers in my mind

As I'm ready to choose death
Your face flashes in my mind
Putting down the razor
Erasing all thoughts

Time to choose
Looking in the mirror
Seeing only my blank stare
I realize what I must do

Seeing your face and smile again
I know I chose the right thing
I know choosing you and life was the best thing I could do
But please don't make me regret my decision


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The following comments are for "Time to Choose"
by disOrder

eh, its ok
I think it would be really good if you didn't use the word death so much. Use a thesaurus and find other words so it doesn't sound so repetitive

( Posted by: Taylor [Member] On: February 21, 2004 )

I liked it
I totally FELT this poem, and in contradiction to Tay, I enjoyed it. It encompasses the feeling of being lost inside one's own hell and having that one person who understands and loves you that saves your life. These type of people are ANGELS. I share the sentiment of this piece, and I found it interesting, emotional, innovative, morbid, yet refreshing/ Good Job!

( Posted by: johnb79 [Member] On: February 22, 2004 )





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