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There is nothing sexier then a woman who
knows her body.
Who loves to show it, flaunt it, and
love it with the right man. A man who
takes his time and pampers it, caress it
and make love till the sunrise and sets.

She doesn't know it yet, but I am that
man. The one who causes her distraction
and the one who tempts her to remove
her golden wedding band. She wants it,
I know she does because I see it in her
eyes.

The passion, the heat of becoming my
lover, she can no longer deny. I walk
to her and brush her shoulder slightly
with my hand. I feel her breathing
rapidly changing and I smile at her and
lean over and say, "I want you right
here right now. I can no longer
wait. . .
TO BE CONTINUED

------
MICHELLE CARROLL


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The following comments are for "The Lover"
by Nina

wedding band
Well, I was really interested in this poem until about the point where you mentioned the wedding band. The conontations are provokative and I like that. However, you feel into using a lot of trite phrases. If the rest of this could be cleaned up to the level of the first stanza with those added line breaks Pen mentioned, this would be a wonderous little piece.

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: February 21, 2004 )





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