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I sit here starring,
starring at my walls.
It feels as if my heart takes a leap
then falls.
plundging throught the floors,
breaking into pieces while passing
closed doors.
I feel as if love only brings pain
hateful words and peole who are all so
vain,
hopeing for someones emotions to gain.
love leaves you crying on the floor so cold and frail.
makes you feel as if you were a hammered on nail,
but as I sit here starring past these walls I see other's hearts
take a leap then fall.
plundging through the flors breaking into pieces
before stopping at my door.

------
~*Abigail*~


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The following comments are for "ne ideas?"
by u wont understand

Actually, I do
Understand, that is. I think this poem would work better for tackling it's subject from a less head-on angle, however. It doesn't differ greatly enough from other poems about heart-break to keep me from getting that creeping sense of poetic deja vu.

And I normally wouldn't point out minor spelling errors, only you managed to misspell this word twice in the same way within 16 lines, so perhaps you didn't know? There is no d in plunging.

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: February 19, 2004 )

and
And only one "r" in staring. Oh well, I knew what you meant

"I have no need of friendship; friendship causes pain.
Its laughter and it's loving I disdain."

( Posted by: evil_bacteria [Member] On: February 20, 2004 )





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