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goodbye

forget that i was there
forget that i made you cry
forget how i made you smile
forget how i ended my life
just forget the bad times for a while
just forget me
forever forget....


------
the nice girl_tabita_(tha~belgium~chick)


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The following comments are for "forget..."
by tabita

Tabita
I liked the emotion behind this poem, but you lost a lot of points in my book with your big-time grammar/spelling mistakes.

The two examples that really got me were "forget how i maked [should be "made"]you smile" and "just forget the bad times for a wail [should this have been "while"?]". Aside from these I though the poem went smoothly enough.

-SD

( Posted by: strangedaze [Member] On: February 26, 2004 )





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