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Escaping? Let me tell you what I know about it. It can be tough but it also can tell you who you are! For some that can be good but for others it could be difficult. It tells you what you want, feel, and desire. Some people need it more than others and some people may want to escape more than others but there is always one question, ďwill I make it?Ē This leads me to my topic about being you!

Being who you are is the hardest task in life! Iím not saying Iím always myself sometimes it gets hard to stand for what you believe in! I try though and most the time I succeed! There are tons of people who arenít being who they were meant to be hey whatís to lose being yourself than being something your not. There is much more to lose being something your not. Itís like your living one big lie! Wouldnít you rather have someone like you for the things you really than something fake? I always admired someone who is there self that stands out from the crowd whether its personality wise or just there style. Me, I try to be both I try to have my own unique style and my own personality.



Iíll tell you what it means to have your own style for me it means independence, doing whatever the hell you want to, and standing up for what you believe! I always remember it being hard to be myself when I didnít dress how I felt. Sure, it sounds weird but to me itís true. I always dressed girly it always made me feel like something I wasnít! I never could pick out a good girly outfit it just never looked right! Plus it didnít draw in the guys either which if you know what I mean sucks! This year I decided why dress like anyone else? So I decide to go with a different look I went with the punk look. Which would be mostly black clothing leather jewelry with studs and spikes on them! Heavy eyeliner, chains, chokers, and skateboarder shoes and of course canít forget those dickie pants! I never felt so alive before in my life sure I get put downs but I just think I am an independent individual, who are they?



I hope you understand my feelings about being yourself maybe try it sometimes!


------
angelia



Comments

The following comments are for "being you"
by punker chick

Just say no to florid Victorians
This is an interesting entry, it certainly gave me an idea about who you are. :) Your article has a kind of conversational quality to it, as though it exists as a soundbite nabbed directly from life. There are some problems with punctuation, grammar and spelling (ie, using their for they're is a common mistake) which if corrected would make this piece easier to read. It also might be a good idea to use your exclamation marks with a little more restraint -- only Valley Girls and florid Victorians use them with such frequency, and these two stereotypes may not be ones you'll want to impress upon your reader's minds in the midst of extolling the reasons why you went punk.

Overall, an intrguing article from an interesting person.

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: February 18, 2004 )

Yeah...
That wasn't anything except a bunch of useless cliches jumbled together, aside from reams of structural and grammatical errors (paste your stuff into Word before you post). I only appreciate "be the real you!" if it's done in an EXTREMELY original manner, otherwise I can just go watch kids shows on YTV because it's going to be pretty much the same thing.

Yes, I can appreciate and respect your successful attempt to break away from the crowd. It's admirable. But did you really need to post this?

( Posted by: Saratin [Member] On: February 20, 2004 )

saratin
Do you even know what a zine is?? well if you don't I suggest you do before you read my peice. A zine can talk about any subject and most likely it talks about the person who wrote it there self. I understand my writing may not be your style but I have a point I wanted to tell people about and I strongly believe thats what I have done! I also posted on microsoft word thats where I began to write it at!!!!!!!

( Posted by: punker chick [Member] On: February 20, 2004 )

Okay, whatever
I don't like what you wrote here, but my criticism wasn't exactly constructive. I could tell you a lot more, but what would be the point? Feel free to dis the stuff I submit if it makes you feel better.

One more thing. I've been to teen writing forums where every hacknyed, half-assed poem is an instant masterpiece. I don't buy into that crap- and I don't care how unpopular it might make me. When I or someone else (yeah right) make comments like that, it's not because we hate you, it's because we hate what you WROTE. Don't take it personally.

( Posted by: Saratin [Member] On: February 20, 2004 )

ahhh
ahh I don't really take these things personal all I say is hey whatever floats your boat! I'm only 14 so I guess this writing makes more sense to me than you!!

( Posted by: punker chick [Member] On: February 21, 2004 )

Hi, Angelia
Hope you're enjoying the website.
Learn to feel good about yourself and your work, but be ready for criticism, (constructive, hopefully). Not everybody will like what you say - that's good, giving you unnecessary grief about it is bad. Don't be put off, you have an interesting 'voice'.
Keep writing,
Paul the Ogg

( Posted by: Ogg [Member] On: February 22, 2004 )

thanx
thanx that was uplifting!!

( Posted by: punker chick [Member] On: February 22, 2004 )

Criticism
Id just like to say, congratulations for sticking up for yourself! I mean sure your spelling might be off in the pieces i've read but if u truly understand poetry spelling is not the important part of it, it's the meaning and the emotion behind it. As far as criticism goes hell, I couldn't rhyme at all let alone have a pattern when I started now i'm told im a very unique and graceful writer. You'll never like everyone and not everyone will like you, but keep going, if writing is your passion it's no ones place to stop you!

( Posted by: endlessfear [Member] On: February 23, 2004 )





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