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I'm cold and tired
I just want to lay my head down
And make everything go away
But what are these feelings
I feel so many things
Things that I want to go away
These feelings, I always feel them
I can never stop these feelings
I want to stop feeling
I need to stop feeling
I lay awake thinking of ways
Ways to stop everything
These feelings will drive me mad
If I cannot stop them
As I cut myself I watch the blood
And as I watch I can see everything
dripping away
Finally sleep is coming
No more of these feelings
As everything starts to slip away
I start to think of something
Maybe I should have given life
a chance
I wonder what could have happened
If I had chosen life
But I do know nothing could feel better
Than what I'm feeling right now
I'm feeling absolutely nothing

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The following comments are for "To Feel Nothing"
by disOrder

I like your use of stream of conscious thought, here. It gives a strong sense of why your poem's voice is choosing suicide. However, I think your work is hurt by an over-reliance on repetition. The consistent use and re-use of the word "feeling", drains your poem of meaning before the final line.

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: February 18, 2004 )

I agree
I think that the form and delivery of this poem would be very deep if not for the repetition of the word "feeling". Otherwise, this poem is very good.

( Posted by: Trunks [Member] On: February 22, 2004 )

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