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Soft winds sweeps away the days.
Memories of the past recalled.
Looking back on life, through a haze.
Things happened, people appalled.

Lighting candles,
A big cinnamon smell.
Sweet aroma without handles.
Forever, that sweet sent dwells.

Bring forth emotions.
Rainy like tears,
Filling the everlasting oceans.
Forgetting all my fears.

Changing into my trunks.
Today’s too warm,
On my way to take an emotional dunk.
My body’s beginning to transform.

A birth, beginning new.
No more lies, no more hate.
Taking off my old shoes.
This new life, going to be great.

Walking down to the stream,
Made by you and me.
I begin to jump, a loud scream.
And now smell, life, new potpourri.

DrkPoet


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DrkPoet


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The following comments are for "FulFilled"
by drkpoet

I could almost and then...no.
Penelope is right on target, here. As a reader I could almost understand the sense you were trying to instill with this poem, but then it just really didn't work out. The description of the cinamon aroma totally threw me off. Does it allude to the last line? Why include a reference to new potpouri? Are you describing a shopping trip followed by a dip in the pool? I think this poem would be aided by more concrete descriptions and a more specific setting.

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: February 17, 2004 )





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