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What right have I?

Unabashed and unreflected intellectual relativism breeds indecision.

"Step up gladiator, take your place. Battle demons, watch out for that banana peel we left for you..."

The ringmaster snickers along with the crowd.
Compulsive turns to see what's sneaking up behind me.
Persperation dripping to the ground, sizzling angry heat.
Drums are pounding.

Out steps the lion from iron teeth of frustration.

Sword withers from the tense grasp.
Vomit rises through the throat as beasts charge in the colorful landscape.
The one weakness bares down on me.

Confusion wraps the air.
Atoms fly.
Reality is unclear.
The angry persperation sizzles in
my iron teeth of frustration.

And the ringmaster snickers with the crowd
as the poet screams for mercy from the thin air.

I beg for release,
drop my defenses and
submit to the demons that
only I can see.

I have no right...
do they?

"God grant me distraction."

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The following comments are for "Improptu"
by Darkshine Raven

fighting stance
Penelope, I expected such a reaction from you. =D And you'd better believe that I'll get back up off the ground and take my fighting stance once again. Just doing my poetic job and recording the experience. Heehe.

And thank you Claire...I'm glad you could pull it apart and find some meaning in there. =D

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: February 16, 2004 )

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