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Comin' back I overstepped,
upon sweet offerings she once possessed.
Your broken honeycomb of untold dreams,
weaved out a paradise, charades of bliss.

Tell me if that's The Secret
behind your brittle wall of defence
I haven't stopped by before
to not turn wide-eyed at your Wonder Plan

Tell me if that's true
is this your grievous plan?
To be free from these thorns of shame that
leaves you with a stainless bestowing triumph.

Laughin' too hard he's chokin' now,
on merriment's Pain.
I don't fancy picturing you like this
dishevelled and slain.

She lays prostrate
from
Self
Vindication.




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The following comments are for "All Along."
by inundatedgrace

the line of..
Your broken honeycomb of untold dreams,
was my favorite because of the fact that it is so vivid and i can see that in my head and i like it a lot.

( Posted by: ryangilr0y [Member] On: March 29, 2005 )





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