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(On a thinly-clouded night, the moon has a halo:
light a waxy paraffin around, entrapping its sharp face;
snow more dense than the concrete below,
and one star's visible in what must be warmer space.)

(Listen for lapses of wind between bass:
thump and (...) to green and red lights;
at an icy stop I feel the onset of words to transcend,
but in the frigid car, the pen cannot write.)

(Red back to green, and by pause I fight,
but the blares behind urge engine whine;
so sliding my tires to stay in sync,
I wait for a warm place to sooth my mind.)

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The following comments are for "Trapped In a Cold Nebraska Night"
by macman202

I really liked this short poem.
It's evocative and succinct.

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: February 11, 2004 )

lovely, but...
why the parentheses?

i think it would be far stronger without them... i'm just a little baffled as to why they're there at all.

otherwise, really well done and yes, succinct.

( Posted by: ark [Member] On: February 12, 2004 )

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