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Superannuated children
At the tether of insensitivity,
These are your work -
Born of selfishness,
Each generation slips away
Further and further.

From every sideways glance
Aimed at revolt
Fleas give birth to dragons
And they do it from the underside
Of workbenches only partially covered with tablecloths.
The month of September in their eyes
Piles their up their hatreds day in and day out,
An anteroom for opportunists
A shelter annihilating love
And -
A prop
For confidence,
Whose opposite face falls into a ravine.

My teacher,
Before the wellspring
of your values dries up...
Draw near, and you'll see the capillary vessles
Of youth.
Draw near,
Before the last vestiges of your sensibilities
Are snuffed out, scattered by the winds of Time.

Oh, I know,
No matter what you plea,
Your inner Tribunal doesn't leave you free
So long as tomorrow drops suffering into your lap.
Events fall out on your right,
Secrets shake you up on your left
The source of worrying
Is in every tomorrow
Looming inside you...
Your accomplishments, my dear teacher,
Only see you
They can't see themselves!...

Üzeyir Lokman CAYCI
Paris - 30.04.2001
Traduit par Yakup YURT en français
French free verse translated into English free verse
by Richard Vallance, 2002


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Üzeyir Lokman ÇAYCI


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The following comments are for "My Teacher"
by cerran

teach me!
I think you should teach me to understand you. =D Seldom do I get lost in following poetry, but I did here. Very good word usage and structure. It felt very nice and smooth. Keep it up, and I'll go back and have another look at this. =D

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: December 4, 2003 )

Fascinating
What a fascinating poem! I really enjoyed reading this, and although it's free verse it has a definite flow and an engrossing rhythm. Like DR, I'm not 100% sure what you're talking about, though I get the feeling it's a plea to an embittered pedagogue to remember why he got into his line of work in the first place, and to remember what it was like to be in the position of his students.

Wonderful phrasing as well. Best poem I've read all day!

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: December 4, 2003 )

Holy crap
Wow. I'm with Viper9 and Darkshine Raven: this poem rocks my world. What a way with words! "Events fall out on your right / Secrets shake you up on your left"! Yes!

"Fleas give birth to dragons / and they do it from the underside"! Good lord, that's a glorious bit of writing! I can think of at least four different ways to interpret that, and they all make my jelly belly quiver with ecstasy! (That's not sarcasm -- I mean it).

A 10 all the way. For Christ's sake, man, post more often.

( Posted by: Boy Howdy [Member] On: December 4, 2003 )





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