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Above the road-mapped surburban vista,
Where children with toy guns - play brother versus sister,
The Brahminy soars on wings of emotion,
Gently maneuvouring her flight of devotion.

Static electricity hummed, hissed and crackled,
As thunderclouds on the horizon billowed and crash-tackled,
The Brahminy calves through the turbulent air,
Scouring the scrub for todays' bill of fare.

Momentarily she hovers, over vine strapped sand dunes,
Before diving headfirst - her speed - breakneck ruin!
Re-emerging triumphant, all covered with sticks,
She wings her way homeward to feed hungry chicks.




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Like the grasses showing tender faces to each other, thus should we do, for this was the wish of the Grandfathers of the World.

Black Elk




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The following comments are for "Brahminy Kite"
by smithy

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This poem definately made me smile smithy! It's a nice, gentle piece that I think really captures a "summeresque" feel. Very fun and interesting. =D

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: November 6, 2003 )

Smithy
Very nice poem indeed here. You got a big smile out of me also.

Blessing

{{{Jeannie}}}

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: November 7, 2003 )

thanks
I'm sorry darkshine, I thought i'd already posted a reply here but it musn't have taken. Been a bit rushed. You picked it.I was on a beach watching the Kites one summer. Thank you.
And thanks Jeanne. I'm glad you liked it.
And thanks to Beatrice Boyle for her poem Alpha to Omega which inspired me to put it in rhyming format.

( Posted by: smithy [Member] On: November 8, 2003 )





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