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subjective thoughts-
fleshly-
in a dark room I took
a taste of her;
at first sight,
her nakedness was
like resplendent armor-
reward hidden-
all along it was
in this dark room.

Like a warrior steeped
in pagan beliefs,
I commence my battle against
innocence-
she welcomes me without delay,
undoing dark,
tearing down the bars, walls
and doors.

Quickly,
I mount her,
pacing myself,
slow-
unbridled, I cannot hold back,
like thunder I crash
into her,
as she released her flavors-
dark and everlasting-
we dove in and out of the night.





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Loved ones, reach out to your children before they are swallowed up by the idiot box.


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The following comments are for "If just for one night, I will write of you, oh muse."
by pablowilliams

"dark and everlasting"
a heady brew, this, with a great stage presence and sense of drama.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: January 15, 2010 )

Whew!
I need a cigarette! Burning, insistent, and satisfying prose!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: January 15, 2010 )

my friends:
Thanks too you both!

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: January 16, 2010 )

So much for innocence
She is innocent but oh so willing... Loved the flow of this. Almost felt like a heartbeat being rushed to finish before the race. I enjoyed this very much. I will have to look for more of you.

Nae.

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: January 19, 2010 )





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