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I am not really certion how the inspiration for this song came about, but it did and here is the finished product. I believe it has aspects of my own life within the words and the images it conjures up are stark


My Beloved Immortal
By
Artorius



I’m tired of being here---alone!
Filled with so much fear
No mere life--and no meaning to a Seer!

I was lost and alone
Thinking of you!
Dreaming of you!
Wondering of you!

Every night in my dreams
I see you, I hear you, I feel you,
That is how I know you are always here for me!

[Chorus]

And I am here---and I am all alone!

What is this feeling called life
When I am so alone again!

Years passed and I watched you from afar
I wiped away your many scarlet tears apart!
I wept for you within my heart!
And yet you still have—me……
…my heart and soul…all alone!

Yet still you searched for them
And you let me fall!

You built a wall between us both
And I fell with no one to catch me.
And I fell for many years....in solitude!

[Chorus]

And I am here---and I am all alone!

What is this feeling called life
When I am so alone again!

Years passed and I watched you from afar
I wiped away your many scarlet tears apart!
I wept for you within my heart!
And yet you still have—me……
….my heart and soul…all alone!

Your scent still fills the air that I breathe
Your presence still caresses me tenderly
My heart still writhes…with emptiness
And your effervescence fills me!

But I fear you are lost and alone!

[Chorus]

And I am here---and I am all alone!

What is this feeling called life
When I am so alone again!

Years passed and I watched you from afar
I wiped away your many scarlet tears apart!
I wept for you within my heart!
And yet you still have—me……
….my heart and soul…all alone!

Far across the distances,
Of time and space between us
That is how I know you are always here for me!

Near, far, yet wherever you are
I believe in the spirit lives on
Once more you will open the portal
And you're here in my heart
And my heart goes on
That is how I know you are always here for me!

[Chorus]

And I am here---and I am all alone!

What is this feeling called life
When I am so alone again!

Years passed and I watched you from afar
I wiped away your many scarlet tears apart!
I wept for you within my heart!
And yet you still have—me……
….my heart and soul…all alone!


Love can touch us one time
And last for all time
And it never lets go till we fade away

Love was when I dared to love you
Our true time I hold onto has come
In my life we'll always live on!

[Chorus]

And I am here---and I am all alone!

What is this feeling called life
When I am so alone again!

Years passed and I watched you from afar
I wiped away your many scarlet tears apart!
I wept for you within my heart!
And yet you still have—me……
….my heart and soul…all alone!


[Spoken softy in the background]

You will always be My Beloved Immortal Love!

The End



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The following comments are for "My Beloved Immortal"
by Artorius

Beloved Immortal
Blow my entry right the hell away... ;)

I like this a lot. You have a gift for lyrics my friend, I went back after this and read some of your other songs. Very good stuff. Thanks for sharing.

( Posted by: HeRoCoMpLeX [Member] On: August 22, 2009 )

Artorius' song entry
I'm out of town for a few days but this was so cool I had to respond. I'm so glad to read you again.
I love the subject matter - something sad and un-attainable - having and still wanting. Nice that. A great example of the muse's random inspiration. Homage to Beethoven and the dark vampire love story. Wonderful.

I can hear in my mind some interesting musical movements in the 1-2-4 chorus format - complex and involved - the tag line 'my heart and soul all alone' is a nicely wrought and defined hook.

I had a little trouble musically with the 3-4-3 2-3- (Is this a bridge?) and 3-4 verse lines. Adding a third stanza on the last verse set would make sense to me. Other than my trivial nitpick this is wonderful. How about another?

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: August 22, 2009 )

Artorius
The universal "All Alone" feel is surely there..

Musically, as Ken, I had a bit of trouble with the bridge..?

Keep putting pen to paper,
Robert William



( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: August 22, 2009 )

My Beloved
Thank you for all the beautiful things you give us to read.. When love is so close one can actually feel all it's wonderful warmth, but yet it's just outside of one's grasp for one reason or another it can cause such intense pain and sadness...and You My dear have a flair for letting us feel both the Joy and Pain of such a Love. This is another Winner in my book!

( Posted by: rlwhodges [Member] On: August 23, 2009 )





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