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People love you more
when you're a story

how they knew you
how you changed
how you touched
how you loved
and you aren't there
to prove them wrong

they start to remember
what they favored
because you aren't there
to remind them

he was a friend
you hated him
he was charitable
a greedy bastard
he was kind
when he wasn't yelling
he was loving
before he turned cold

We believe in Heaven
so we can abandon the living
meet them again
when they are fresh
young
new

not to be bothered
with old
sick
used

waiting for children
they gave their lives for
waiting to meet their parents
waiting to meet their children

a grave was a hole
that was filled
with dreams
ambition
joy
happiness
sadness
and for most
the only proof
that we may have mattered






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The following comments are for "When You're A Story"
by rancidsauce

When a story
Wow! Outstanding. That's all just outstanding!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: July 3, 2009 )





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