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within a sky of crisp, faded green 
i stand 
surrounded by the drops of silence 
rapping at thoughts never leaving 
then 
it stops 
and i can see 
the clerity of dreams adorned 
with light of morning heavens

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http://vpoet.net -- i'm scared, mommy.


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The following comments are for "the princess and the warrior"
by po

Then
A surreal little poem, and quite effective too, though I'm not sure if there is meant to be a hidden meaning behind it somewhere? The importance of realisation perhaps? I can only speculate. The best word in the whole poem is "then", where you immediately slow the already floaty pace of the piece and make the reader pay attention. I like it.

( Posted by: False Dawn [Member] On: July 20, 2003 )





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