- published: April 26, 2003
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hovering above the crick-crock world
tearing apart shell
letting time stand still
atleast until breath takes hold
http://vpoet.net -- i'm scared, mommy.
the princess and the warrior
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Your poetry is in a very cryptic style. Every single word needs to be thought about to consider what you were trying to say.
All that makes it a little hard going to read, and I don't think I've got as much out of this piece as I could have.
Still, it's an interesting piece of writing. Score 7/10.
] On: May 5, 2003
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