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As I stare out into the ocean,
I wish that the tides
Would carry me away.
Away from this frozen moon
As it tries to escape destiny.
Should I take a step closer?
And allow myself to flow away.
I`ll drift off to a distant land,
One where the sun ceases to set,
One where the only thing frozen
Is time.

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The following comments are for "Time"
by anya_awaits

Very nice.
I really liked this poem. It only really starts to come together at the end, which meant I had to go back and re-read it a few times to get the full meaning.

Score 8/10.

( Posted by: Spudley [Member] On: May 5, 2003 )

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