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I know the strength to stand alone
Plays hide-and-seek within my heart
It's olly, olly, all come free
I grasp at straws and fall apart

I think my courage knows the score
It's molten lava churns my gut
It's olly, olly, all come free
And the volcanoes soon erupt

I've heard that faith is great to have
To bind the fibres of the soul
It's olly, olly, all come free
To hell and back I've dug the hole

You said you liked the intellect
That flexed it's claws against my mind
It's olly, olly, all come free
But you've lost interest in the find

I know my pride is still intact
It sparks the fires of prejudice
It's olly, olly, all come free
I seal my fate with flaming kiss

But can you teach me how to love?
Injection, pill or smoke or drink?
It's olly, olly, all come free
Before in bitterness I sink


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The following comments are for "Bravery"
by desconocida

i likey
The repetitive stanza really works for you as does the unusual rhyme scheme. A few lines seem a bit long to me, thus disrupting the nice rhythm you have in the first two stanzas but all in all a good piece.

( Posted by: Bartleby [Member] On: June 11, 2003 )





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