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Through the streets he steps without effort of control. Un-laboured and without care, he is many things, but mostly he isn’t. There are no distractions from him, his ease wipes clean the imperfections of his surroundings, making them sparkle and ignite, shine brighter than even the most complete of moments purely through his presence. It is as if the world has held its collective breath, sweating slightly on the brow, worried of disturbing the fine balance that hangs in his wake. But they cannot. They will not. He is beyond this moment, transcending the strings the bind us, walking to his own beat and never smiling. We are careless, we are clumsy, we fail and fall and smile and laugh. He does not. Is not. Cannot.

Wherever he goes the wind follows and darkness cools the blur. Reality becomes a pause, a second before and after, but never when he walks. And yet few turn their heads. Few acknowledge his presence as if to do so would break the reflection of the midnight pool, bathed in perfect moon guilt.

Who is he? The unanswerable question


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Remember my friend, despite all you are, all we are, the universe will tick on, long past our departure.


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The following comments are for "The Guy."
by Thea Veol

The guy
Flash fiction is not a skill I possess. It is the failing of a busy and unclear mind.:) This works for me. Thanks for the lesson.

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: June 2, 2009 )

Flash fiction?
This is flash fiction?

I'm going to have to do some more research on this! The whole idea behind flash intriques me, and I think I want to try my hand at it.

This piece, however, was submitted as a short story. Should I reclassify it to the flash fiction section, or should I just leave it here?

Ochani

( Posted by: OchaniLele [Admin] On: June 3, 2009 )

flash fiction
As I understand it - the internet and the 'eight second rule' has created this format of writing whole stories in a really short format (500 words or less). I'm an old guy, and often out of touch - so I may have it wrong. If anyone out there knows the real rules - how about wading in!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: June 3, 2009 )

Erm...
I didn't know this was 'flash fiction', in fact I don't really know what flash fiction is, I just wrote it and wanted to put it up but wasn't sure how to classify it. It's only a name anyway, it's short, sort of a story, close enough for me.

( Posted by: Thea Veol [Member] On: June 6, 2009 )





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