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Never Sleep
Written by Vember Judgement

00: 49th Hour

"Mom...Dad...If you're watching this...It means that I lost the game. It means that I fell asleep before I'm supposed to…"

The light buzz of the digital camcorder in front of her and the alarm clock strapped to her right leg had been the only sounds Carol had heard in the last day and a half. She could barely keep her own head up, as the growling of her stomach furthered her agony. The numerous roaches and ants crawling over her body for the last few hours no longer bothered her, as her entire body was beyond numb. Crusts of dried tears and blood fell from her face as she continued to speak to the camcorder.

"They said if for fifty strait hours I never get any sleep, I'll win the game and they won't kill me...But if I close my eyes..."

Her leg muscles began to twitch instinctively, trying to escape the ropes that bound them. Carol knew it was completely fruitless, being how tightly to the wheelchair she was. Arms, legs, torso, throat...She could barely move an inch. In addition, just to make sure she could not push her way out, the wheels were heavy with sandbags and dumbbells, making it impossible to push herself along. The alarm clock at her feet suddenly began to beep, indicating that the time was 2:58am.

"Forty-nine hours, I've been up...One more to go, and I'll win their sick game...Just one more..." With an added bit of energy suddenly willed into her body, Carol looked around the dreary back room that had been her prison since it all got started. It would otherwise be bare and dark if not for the dozens of candles that littered the floor (of which many had burned out hours ago). She glanced over to the partially bordered up window at the other end of the room and saw a lone blue eye peaking in. Carol began to cry.

"Just in case I pass out...In case I lose it in the next sixty minutes...I'll tell you everything that lead up to this..." The beautiful blue eye that looked in blinked four times then disappeared into the darkness outside. Carol took a long, sorrowful breath before looking directly into the camcorder.

"It all started when I first met the one who did this to me..."

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Time to watch the stars die...


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The following comments are for "Never Sleep 00: 49th Hour"
by Vember Judgement

yikes
Nicely done Vember. An excellent short hook to draw in the reader. Scary and claustrophobic. Whoever her tormenters are, they are very sick puppies.
Look forward to reading the next instalment and I'll proceed hastily over as soon as I've posted this.
take care
Paul

( Posted by: Ogg [Member] On: March 9, 2009 )

@ Vember
I'm not sure just HOW I missed reading this. But tonight, at work, it is slow, so I took some time to read the longer pieces that have been showing up on litdotorg.

Vember, this is brilliant! I love fiction, and I'm a horror fan, and you, my friend, have a gift.

I'm very excited. I'm going to read the next installment tonight, and then one installment per day until I'm finished.

And if the rest is this good, well, I hope you don't mind if I feature it in the future issues of "Majestic"!

Which reminds me: I need to start playing with the new newsletter software/services I've been thinking of using. So much to do!

Ochani

( Posted by: OchaniLele [Admin] On: April 8, 2009 )

sleep
Yikes! Good job at writing creepy. I'll read the next with darksome glee.

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: April 8, 2009 )





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