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Thrown out by the wayside
Cast upon a dreadful sea
I wonder at my destination
And what will become of me

Am I smaller than the challenge?
Will there be arrows in midstream?
Or dire thoughts and tales to tell
Of the darkness in my dreams

I may shrink before the tower
Or bravely rise at morn’s first bell
Will I fight what I cannot see?
Or fail just as the darkness fell

My life may yet be splendid
I may pass life’s every test
Accepting every award I'm due
But dreading my eternal rest

But I’m a poet and contrary
Writing what others only feel
Shadows and ropy musings
On wounds that never heal

There must be other dreamers
To share this different way
Ones to walk along with me
And sing to each fading day

Or those drone to drag me down
Ill tongues that wag and bend
Saying heaven doesn’t care
There’s no sin you need defend

Will I bend to raging storms?
Those that howl to bar my way
When I - hard driven down,
Will God hear the words I pray?

I know there is a better world
Though true - no reason can I tell
Feelings may be truer things
The stuff of a far deeper well




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Why is doing what you love the hardest thing to do? Is it because failing what you thought defined you would be too devastating a thing from which to recover? If so, we stay where mere accident has left us.


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The following comments are for "Deeper Well"
by jonpenny

Nice
Really enjoyed the poem. You touch on a lot of big questions, some I write about myself. Nice to see someone else expressing some of the same questions and feelings...I think that's one of the things that poetry and writing are all about.

I love the way things tie together nicely at the end of the poem. The last four lines were really satisfying. Also liked how the title related to the end of the poem without giving anything away. I'm often at a loss of what titles to use and will keep that in mind.

( Posted by: Eldros [Member] On: March 1, 2009 )

@jonpenny
Loved it! You portraited human struggle with deeper thoughts very well. Gale.

( Posted by: Gale [Member] On: March 1, 2009 )

@Eldros and Gale
Thank you very much
Bless you both
Ken

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: March 2, 2009 )

Well
Eternity is our final wish. Great write.

( Posted by: MonkFrost [Member] On: March 3, 2009 )

Deeper Well
MonkFrost: Indeed! Indeed! Thanks

Dagger: Sigh! Mine too! ;) Thanks

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: March 3, 2009 )





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