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You walked into the room and my heart stopped.
Just a glimpse and you caught my breath.
I watched and waited.
I wanted you to notice me.

I want to be used.
I want to be bound.
I want to be taken.
I want to be broken.
I want only you to be real.

You saw me sitting there, your prey.
You had me with a look.
The transparent conversation washed away.
All I could see was you.

I want to be used.
I want to be bound.
I want to be taken.
I want to be broken.
I want only you to be real.

You pulled and guided me away,
Away from the crashing faces.
The noise wandered off,
With the shut of a door.

I want to be used.
I want to be bound.
I want to be taken.
I want to be broken.
I want only you to be real.


(Whispers)
You took me away from it all.
Wrenching me to new heights.
Caressing me to ultimate lows.
Giving me the greatest love and beautiful peace.


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"Ink drips from the corners of my mouth. There is no happiness like mine. I have been eating poetry."
-- Mark Strand


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The following comments are for "Breaking in."
by Kine

use me
the chorus in this piece is very strong. i liked it a lot. good work kine.

jimmy g.

( Posted by: JimmyAndHisRocket [Member] On: November 5, 2004 )





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