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A red ball of a sun
sent golden shafts
through the canopy
of ancient oaks; their
gnarled roots
showed above the earth
like a testimony
of their mighty strength.

At the very centre
of a ring of toadstools;
that grew in this clearing,
she stood alone in a gown
of flowing gossamer.

Soon he would arrive
and carry her
to the secrecy
of the long grassses.
His cloak would softly blanket
their lovers bed
as only a voyeur skylark
would hover and witness
a new creation
on the grasslands
of Tranquility.


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The following comments are for "Tranquility"
by ograd77

@ ograd77
This was a very sensual poem. I love how it begins with a big picture, the sun in the sky, and leads us to the smaller scene, the woman standing in the ring of toadstools.

And then it ends with the two making love.

How nice!

Ochani

( Posted by: OchaniLele [Admin] On: January 4, 2009 )

I love this
Just getting around to reading this one. I love what you have here. Wonderful balance of creation and intimacy. Vivid work. Thank you so much.

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: October 18, 2009 )

2ograd77
Gotta be real careful of fairy rings. This is one of my favorites of yours - loved it! Beautiful word choices and terrific imagery. Nice!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: October 19, 2009 )

Appreciated
Thanks for reading and leaving your kind comment.
Ian

( Posted by: ograd77 [Member] On: October 19, 2009 )





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