Adulthood (sans Commentary)
by SirEdwinSantos (Member) - published: December 24, 2008
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Category - Poetry
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Adulthood
Andrew Poff
December 2nd, 2008

First of all I'm deeply worried
About the blood-white bones I've burried
I'm all stuffed up with PVC
Cut with a bone saw close at hand
I'm the blood-blue cold and cotton eyed man
Of whom I made fun when I was young
-and said
The old are lifeless and boring

Makeshift hinges I've been given
With metal pins... so I can walk
And do my work and eat my food
And fuck my wife and hate my life
No wonder my joints ache and creak
When I get up in the morning
And am feverishly digging
Hole after six foot hole
In a grid
In my backyard

I found
My dog

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Siredwinsantos@gmail.com

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The following comments are for "Adulthood (sans Commentary)"
by SirEdwinSantos

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I haven't had the chance to read the piece with commentary; I will have to look in the archives and see if I can find it.

I'm sure this has nothing to do with your poem here, but the beginning reminds me of something that was in the news this year -- the mortician who was removing bones and other tissue from cadavers, selling it to medical supply for human transplant. He then buried the bodies with PVC pipes replacing the bones he removed. Very chilling it was -- like something from a horror flick.

Just in case the original commentary is nowhere to be found, could I talk you into explaining why you wrote this poem? What inspired it?

Ochani Lele

( Posted by: OchaniLele [Admin] On: December 24, 2008 )

Commentary
Oh, the version with commentary is in my archives if you click on my name. I mainly wrote it because I'm not necessarily depressed, though feel I should be, but my emotions have become strangers to me. So it's a metaphor... but every bit of it is a metaphor for some small OTHER metaphor for the overall theme. Yeah. Fun, I know. Thanks for reading. Comment on my other things if you enjoy them!
I've got another post up in the same vein. A more dedicated piece called "Automaton" about the 'Macro' level of this sort of thing. Check it out. Peace and love!!

( Posted by: siredwinsantos [Member] On: December 24, 2008 )

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