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We the owners,
In order to grow a more perfect business,
Establish profits, ensure the public liquidity,
Provide for a private defense,
Eliminate welfare and
Procure the estates of many for ourselves
And our own progeny,
Do refrain from obeying this constitution
Of the United States of America



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The following comments are for "The New Preamble to the US Constitution"
by Tamir

Funny and too true
Bravo, Tamir! I say: Fly the Constitution instead of the flag. Swear allegiance to something truly meaningful.
Of course, Bush did that at his Inauguration, and it made no difference.

( Posted by: poeteye [Member] On: December 9, 2008 )

Thanks for the comments
I'm tempted to continue right on modifying the rest of it. :) I'll try to work on it from time to time and post what i have as modifications of this one. We'll see how it goes.

( Posted by: Tamir [Member] On: December 10, 2008 )

Tamir?
Is that Israeli?

M

( Posted by: gamblerman [Member] On: December 11, 2008 )

Bona fide
Born and even served in the IDF, sadly confessed though it is :)

( Posted by: Tamir [Member] On: December 11, 2008 )

response to 'TNPTTUC'
Punch line so selfish-- but proving portentous having the function or powers of ominous oracling. At who's expense-- self evident one asserts. Humour, but scholarly writing more assured. Long-term plans in the pipeline.

firstedition

( Posted by: firstedition [Member] On: December 11, 2008 )

good
isnt this what the idea of the "free world" was supposed to prevent? Over 900 of my relatives died in the civil war, the north killed them for the banking system of olde.

( Posted by: roach [Member] On: December 12, 2008 )

Not Good Enough
Of course, you're right, Roach. The system, as my feeble attempt at articulation shows, just wasn't good enough to safeguard our collective future from the bottomless bellies of the bankers. I whole heartedly recommend everyone reads "Mutual Aid" by Peter Kropotkin to study what manner of natural government provides a fail-safe hope of continuously sustainable democracy. Thanks for your astute observation. :)

( Posted by: Tamir [Member] On: December 12, 2008 )

not Good Enough
Of course, you're right, Roach. The system just wasn't good enough to safeguard our collective future from the bottomless bellies of the bankers. I strongly recommend everyone reads Peter Kropotkin's "Mutual Aid" in order to understand what manner of natural government can alone provide a continuously sustainable order for society.

( Posted by: Tamir [Member] On: December 12, 2008 )





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