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#1

In the antic dark
Two swift affections collide
Borning numb kigo.

#2

A slow concussion
Begins her tender lysis,
Empties the slow bone.

#3

He hollows his needs
To a lunatic patience
While coarse hands winter.

#4

No, I don’t love you
No, you are not beautiful
As a raw mortal.

#5

A weird Y divines
Your narrow chest, offering
A rare white flower.

#6

A sad apathy
Absolves us, so we bend low
Dumbly genuflect.

#7

His accusations
Cilice our dim silences
Leaving a red band.


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The human race, the only race I know where everybody loses.


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The following comments are for "by degrees"
by AuldMiseryGuts

In Too Deep
Im way too sleepy or this is way too deep for me...or both...or both...I really like the divisions here like one circular tapestry of Haiku...Haiku with a point that is...

Beer gives you man boobs!!!!

( Posted by: kilgoretrout [Member] On: November 20, 2008 )

deeply sleepy pointy haiku
til in the end the day came in the end came close of a long day and all that and all that ;)...

thank you my kind and only reader, for at least keeping me company. matchstick legs 4 manboobs ;)

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: November 20, 2008 )

haiku or no
I'm intriqued by the construction of this piece. It's ambitious but it works for me not as hiiku but as the way the mind thinks. Disjointed ideas make sense, connections made where none seem to be. When I first read it my mind wouldn't co-operate. Letting it float like the insights of an altered state and something dawns and is revealed. A lot of work for a poem. Thanks for making the effort.

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: November 20, 2008 )

HAIKU?
I am apparently sliding into dementia.Not noting the category heading. I read these as one work not a series of haikus. The numbers seemed creative.(Lunacy and genius are so very near to one another.) The odd thing is I found meaning in what I read. So much for any critical street cred I might have once supposed to possess.However even so if you removed the numbers it is interesting. That's my story anyway.
Yours sincerely,
K.L.Obtuse

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: November 20, 2008 )





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