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He’s lying there, making
His minor subtractions

Withholds his erection
With a genital petulance
Unworthy of him,
In my honest opinion

An’ I tell him come on
But he twists his retort
From my goosebumped back
In the form of a burn.

I don’t want to, he says
And he means it

He is reticent white
And I know not to
Argue

So my fingers divine
Their own
Classic of Changes,
Yarrow stalks plastered
With cud and with lace.


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The human race, the only race I know where everybody loses.


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The following comments are for "On The Banks"
by AuldMiseryGuts

response to 'OTB'
Interesting: AMG's re-use of the pleasent phrase:
''yarrow stalks''- literary ambigousness, no less.

So my fingers divine
Their own
Classic of Changes,
Yarrow stalks plastered
With cud and with lace.

Back to literary excellence;
reminds FE of Room 207.

firstedition

( Posted by: firstedition [Member] On: November 19, 2008 )

thanking three
Rogan, Crowley would no doubt have approved ;)... became lately fascinated by I- Ching but find acceptance and process infuriating… keep tossing up lonely, dispassionate hexagrams… as with so much else in life…

Chloe, in this case dirty suppositions not unfounded ;)… sums up aloneness for me, though, actually very sad…

fe you and I will probably beg to differ, as I’m not so fond of this. I’m glad you are, but it makes me too unhappy, leaves me feeling dejected… the I-Ching, and the yarrow stalks will doubtless crop up again, they my motif of the moment, captured me imagination…

thank you all for sharing this with me, and for not being too disgusted ;)

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: November 20, 2008 )





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