mas, mas, mas
by thesadpoet (Member) - published: November 21, 2008
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Category - Poetry
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quiero mas
Me madre no quiere nada
y estoy solo
pero cuando la musica comienza
yo vengo a vida

I want more
My mother wants nothing
And I\'m alone
But when the music begins
I come to life

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Does the wadded up paper ball or the bowling ball fall faster?

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by thesadpoet

response to 'more, more, more'
Thank you for the accompanying translation. Unsure if this ultimo is discursive or part delirium-coated with simplified sustenation? That said, it resonates nearer to home than home-truths. Or is this an altruistic version of? A coming of age? I come to life? more, more, more... literary ambiguousness. But too mysterious and too meaty to ignore. However, ''lost in translation'' ... Unsure if the poem's two-tone simile is fractured? For my part, ''when the music begins'', suggestive of many connotations which need firmly anchoring to bring breadth to your piece. Defintely an air of knowledge. Please share?

firstedition

( Posted by: firstedition [Member] On: November 22, 2008 )

literary ambiguousness
I would consider this poem to be the most vague simple poem describing my child hood with layers of maturity concerning my parents, bring together my past present and future. It feels like almost too much to squeeze into such a small poem right?

( Posted by: thesadpoet [Member] On: November 22, 2008 )

sadpoet
King David played joyful songs, his gift to God, his musical prayers.

( Posted by: MrSmith [Member] On: November 23, 2008 )

reply to 'more, more, more'
Right. I salute you. As I read the poem, it made sense with or without the key you attach of past, present, and future tenses. This poem will mean many things to many a different background, deprived or stability of life's graduation. So that is something special. I belive you answered my question- although music could be better defined to anchor its unequivocal value to the reader. However, I am sure this is what you intended first-hand? [9]

firstedition

( Posted by: firstedition [Member] On: November 23, 2008 )

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