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We are stretched men,
Hung by hairs breadths
And nothing more

He tells me they
Took her apart

And he’s spitting distance
From dying hisself.

It is,
In the end
Our failures that
Champion us

And we find ourselves
Accidentally hallowed

Our old solace
Rigorously wintered

It is our unhappiness that
Forgives us

Cracked Saints,
Drunk on denial.


A woman died
That day

There were others

Took to their poses,
Performed mangled stations

And blame has nothing
To drink

Crawls shrinking and salted
From mouthing wrecks.

But brothers died too,
There was family

The factored dead
My mother did Mass for

Is it my fault I can’t
Make the equation balance?

Is it my fault I can’t
Unify fields?

And them fuckers
Fork fun at us,
Laughing

We’re diligently joked,
Unkindly

Spat on for spurious
Negated, re-
childrened.



A woman died
That day

There were others

A woman was winnowed
Chaff on black air.



------
The human race, the only race I know where everybody loses.


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The following comments are for " arses and elbows #3"
by AuldMiseryGuts

Arses #3 is gut wrenching, Shannon!
Hi Shannon,
This combo of stanzas killed me. Jumped out at me from the dark like jaguar!


"And them fuckers
Fork fun at us,
Laughing

We’re diligently joked,
Unkindly

Spat on for spurious
Negated, re-
childrened.



A woman died
That day

There were others"

---------------------end quote by auldmiseryguts


My G-d, Shannon,
This is so painful...yet so in your face HARSH reality like a hard slap! Wake up. See this! I am blow away...if this is a continuation of 1 and 2 and all fits together then I see I was pretty close to capturing the feelings you were going through in these, going over memories, the past, regrets, rage, and the fucking bastards laughed...that was what got to me the most!


Blessings, my friend,
to you and yours;-)

Namaste,
Lena

( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Admin] On: November 4, 2008 )

Shannon... of vaginal clockwork
Shannon,

I read this as a sly mockery of male masculinity and the tendency to devise their female categories in the separation of sluts and hard-to-gets, but eventually, will-gets. The poem is beautiful and heart-wrenching, containing words that clutch, not float. Thank you for this.

Best,
Ariana

( Posted by: Ariana [Member] On: November 4, 2008 )

Phenomenal
This was amazing...each stanza seemed to create its own world, telling a story through individual images.

( Posted by: JonnyT [Member] On: November 4, 2008 )

thanking four
thank you kindly to all who commented this and the preceding pieces. there is a #4 but I don't think I'll be posting it here. I will come back to thank everyone individually in a while, but for now I have two sick dogs to take to the vets… such is life. all the best. síochán.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: November 5, 2008 )





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