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Bought five dead butterflies in a frame
on a rainy day and carried them
out of the store. The bag
had butterflies on it, a purple bow
tying its handles together
after the lady had said the packaging
"must needs be pretty".
I, too, wanted an occasion
to say, out loud, "must needs be",
sound refined, distinguished, accomplished...

Crouched to roll up, though, my too-long jeans
into impromptu cuffs, avoid my ankles
those bad weather April deep sidewalk puddles
but most of all not trip, fall,
drown my pinned insects... And grieve.

Crossed a literary festival street,
pushed a heavy door open, you greeted
with an emerald accent, lilt tilted to rain.
Apron was tied to the beam you leaned on, you wore
your jeans cuffed too!
I caught your pub smile in contagion,
hung onto it like addiction while you hurried
to wipe off a table top
with great energetic sweeps of your left-handed rag
in time with "All you Need is Love".

------
Of all known institutions, I attend only two: church, in my heart, and school, in yours. Both are subject to demolition. - Lucie Adams, 2007
It is only for poetry to know how many stanzas fit into one caress. - Lucie Adams, 2008


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The following comments are for "Ontario village"
by windchime

All I need is love |& butterflies
I must admit when I first read dead butterflies I thought this was not going to be so pleasant. I was wrong.

I felt like I was walking down the street with you. Rainy days can be so beautiful and this certainly was one for me.

"...an emerald accent..." You express yourself so beautifully. I would never even think to describe an accent in this way...emerald, I love emerald.

Thank you for making my first read here in a while a pleasent one.

( Posted by: TAMMYHENDRIX [Member] On: October 20, 2008 )

Lucie
Sorry, hit the send button too soon.

Meant to ask you, are there really places you can go to buy dead butterflies?

( Posted by: TAMMYHENDRIX [Member] On: October 20, 2008 )

Of "emerald accent"..
..and Lennon's voice..

Lucie,
An enjoyable tour...

"must needs be" noted for returning to...

"it's easy..."..

Ciao,
Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: October 20, 2008 )

Lucie... of tilted lilt
This reminds me of a romantic cityscape watercolor, your choice: Ontario village, in the rain. An aromatic, accurate choice of words and the placement of sensational outpourings. The contrasts of colors work well to form an opposite palate that naturally blends into itself.

Grief is a cracked chrysalis, empty of unhurt sorrows as butterflies' cradles burnish to soot. That's what the piece speaks to me.

Thank you.

Best,
Ariana

( Posted by: Ariana [Member] On: October 20, 2008 )

Lucie and Butterflies.
Lucie...I loved this...my first reaction was, I'm so glad Lucie has found a moment of serenity...the butterflies being metaphoracle for escaping your world of death and dying, if only for a short time. But then I realized that the butterflies, really hadn't escaped at all, and I said a prayer for you (again!)

Hope your new job, gives you many more moments of escape! You and back and we love having you!

Love ya
Bea

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: October 20, 2008 )

Lucy in the Sky...
This is such a great slice of life and death...you certainly are not pinned down behind glass are you...I can see Windy splashing through puddles with rolled up cuffs...

Smile...

( Posted by: kilgoretrout [Member] On: October 20, 2008 )

Lucie's Love...
Ah...Lucie, all you we all need is love and this showcases your constant awareness of such....

All love,
Namaste,
Lena

( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Admin] On: October 20, 2008 )

Lucie, came back with mouse tail tale, and how LIFE is beautiful!
This poem brought me to place (besides what I already said in previous comment) to compassion, thinking of those pinned butterflies that I am sure have gone on to higher life forms...or whatever, the other day one of my 3 cats was in the basement, came up to me had a little wiggle tale sticking out of his mouth, it was a mouse trying to find a home in our basement and get in out of the cold, so I held the mouses tale with one hand while prying open my cats jaws, and was glad to find the mouse unharmed, just scared and shaking...So, this is 4 am in the morning, I cannot kill it, it is a living soul sentient being and in the middle of the night I can only imagine what neighbors thought when looking out the window by chance me running down the street with my are stuck straight out (tiny mouse and tale I am holding can't be seen in those hours) anyway, ran all the way to the park to drop him off and let him go free but away from my house...hahahah! I felt a sadness reading about the butterflies and the rain, and joy in the adventure of it all, and the awareness, always that awareness of love aura that surrounds you....you know that mouse or those butterflies could have been our great grandparents or something, who knows? Love this poem, felt like I was shopping and enjoying life with you in in all its majestic to and fr-oms and there and her-es, etc.-----with ALL love, you taught me that...one, ALL love.

Namaste!
Lena

( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Admin] On: October 20, 2008 )

Ontario village
I like what Kilgoretrout said, 'slice of life and death'. Besides seeing this poem as 'watercolor-romantic' (copying what Ariana said) and beautiful slice-of-life piece, I also see the poem as really telling more about the dead butterflies, and didn't they get more of people's attention here? Even more than what the chap in the last stanza deserves to get.

Butterfly symbolizes change, joy and color; for them to be already dead, pinned down and framed, and later on be soaked is somehow for me a bad omen. But the scene in the bar or restaurant is kind of an upper, so I decided the poem is a positive one. And if All You Need is Love is a song, then I find this poem as also a perfect love poem.

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: October 21, 2008 )

"must needs be pretty"
I'm coming to this late, but I'm glad I got here before it fell from the front page. found this replete with the possibilities of meeting, full of anxious effervescent energy, colouring the landscape of the two who meet and rendering it as clearly as if reader was other party…

wish this reader was other party, could find myself described as “emerald accent, lilt tilted to rain.” … beautiful, Lucie, so much so even dead butterflies are released from stasis and aloud to become part of living, poetic terrain…

all you need, indeed. miss ye.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: October 26, 2008 )

walking with you...
I agree, I felt as if I were walking with you through this shopping and arriving to and fro, but then thats nothing new.

Miss you girl!

( Posted by: LMJ [Member] On: November 3, 2008 )

and you said it
must needs be....all you need is love

well that says a lot. very nicely writ.

bw

( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: February 26, 2009 )





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