Recombinants
by windchime (Member) - published: October 19, 2008
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Give you nothing of myself
we can call "restorative"
yet you choose to pause anyway
at ivy-thick heartgates of mine,
their perpetual summer,
your warmth.
You invent these for yourself,
invest me into your garden dream
first,
and then
into official redefinition of heart.
Yes, I suppose I love you
even doing this,
maybe especially doing this.
You take on a light I want to stand under.
You take on heaven & pull it
to shoulder-wrap
& you stand there, incandescent as stars
& the things you say
now sound like prayer, ode, psalm
& you feign sacred well enough,
finally,
to revere my silences as templar.
My surrender to gratitude will stay the snows
at your brittle eyes.

------
Of all known institutions, I attend only two: church, in my heart, and school, in yours. Both are subject to demolition. - Lucie Adams, 2007
It is only for poetry to know how many stanzas fit into one caress. - Lucie Adams, 2008

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The following comments are for "Recombinants"
by windchime

Lucie's "Recombinants"
I looked up the word Recombinants, then thought about your poem again, re-read, and thought how does this fit into the definitions and DNA and all that said in the dictionary? I must admit defeat this time Lucy, hard as I have read, and I have several times here, it feels too personal or beyond me, swoosh over me I should say instead...
...that I cannot say I get it. There are bits and pieces here and there that I like, like the not so smart reader saying "you sure gots some purty words here" but to give a an honest critique from understanding this poem in in wholeness I cannot do.

Now watch, the next one coming along and the next and the next will get it without a hitch...but since I am supposed to follow the tenants of what I do truly believe that ego is but illusion, I won't be embarrassed by this confession...otherwise I would have left it alone. What I want is your explanation...after everyone else gets it.

I will say though out of it all I liked this as a poem within a poem that I took and made subjective to my own projections and meaning:

"invest me into your garden dream
first,
and then
into official redefinition of heart.
Yes, I suppose I love you
even doing this,
maybe especially doing this.
You take on a light I want to stand under.
You take on heaven & pull it
to shoulder-wrap
& you stand there, incandescent as stars
& the things you say
now sound like prayer, ode, psalm"

To me that whole section was simple beautiful, and that is all I can say for now.

Blessings,
ALL love,
Lena

( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Admin] On: October 19, 2008 )

Windchime
I guess all I can say is I don't really know what you are talking about here, what you are saying, but that you say it so beautifully and delicately that you make it a pleasure to be ignorant.
That is the word and way I feel about a lot if not all of your poetry that I have read, delicate.
Like gossamer, you must hold your breath sort of as you read or this thing of beauty will simply disintegrate on you. Robert

( Posted by: robnjop [Member] On: October 19, 2008 )

I thought I understood it
But after reading the comments, I thought there might be something I missed or misinterpreted. I read it again and there are a few things that I was less sure that I fully understood, but on the whole I thought it was clear. I hope you're not planning on explaining it to anyone.
I loved the image: ivy-thick heartgates.

( Posted by: poeteye [Member] On: October 19, 2008 )

windchime's redefining..
.."heart"..

Lucie,
Knowing what you do for a living and being aware of personal matters we all must face, regarding family, I read this with those things in mind.

Beyond personal, as well as its universal story, I also found a transcendent level.

Empathy, grace, awareness...

"invest me into your garden dream"..
"redefinition of heart"...

Your voice shines. One to return to...

Take care of you,
Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: October 19, 2008 )

Lucie... of Garden of Eden and heavenly persona
Lucie,

Many, many ways to approach this poem, as I hinted in the title of my post. I interpreted it as a tribute to the Shakespearean psychosis of human relationships - how the feeling of mutuality is tainted by desire and the lack of it.

Your poetry is beckoning for the taste of lips - be the self provider.

Thank you so much for this!

Best,
Ariana

( Posted by: Ariana [Member] On: October 19, 2008 )

Having help, hope
I get a simple meaning from the poem, that it is very nice to have someone to rely on, to fall back on, to be able to trust someone enough to follow them when we temporarily lose our own confidence and direction.

It reminds me of how even children can show us something important, without even trying or knowing they have done that. The lines that bring this to my mind:

You invent these for yourself,
invest me into your garden dream
first,
and then
into official redefinition of heart.

and

You take on a light I want to stand under.
You take on heaven & pull it
to shoulder-wrap
& you stand there, incandescent as stars

Those seem to me very honest qualities -- things that change us whether or not we want to change.

Hope I'm close...

BW

( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: October 19, 2008 )

Beautiful
Oh how touching and melodic. You are truly a poet.

( Posted by: RevelationResurrection [Member] On: October 25, 2008 )

Beautiful
RevelationsResurrection took the word first, but I was sent here to see for myself what your writing was all about, and had to use the that same word. What other word can best describe what is here than beautiful?

( Posted by: wguilddragoness [Member] On: October 25, 2008 )

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