Lit.Org - a community for readers and writers Advanced Search
 




Average Rating
9.5

(4 votes)


RatingRated by
10Unknown
9Unknown
10Unknown
9Unknown

You must login to vote

Dungeon
 
I.

Dark 
 
I scream into the void 
Of my faceless nightly wanderings 
 
I look for the truth 
In a blackened starless night 
 
I whisper all my musings 
To the shadows that will listen 
 
I continue down the maze  
As it starts to shrink in size 
 
I start to lose my way  
It is the creature from inside 
 
This is my life 
Lost… 
 
 
II.

Light
 
I peer into the core 
Of the waxing silver moon 
 
I listen to the shadows  
In the rambles after dusk 
 
I look into the mirror  
To find myself again 
 
I try to find my way 
As this world seeks to lose me 
 
I search for the light 
It finds me just in time 
 
This is my life 
Found. 


------
You cannot teach a man anything; you can only help him find it within himself.
-Galileo


Related Items

Comments

The following comments are for "Dungeon"
by Drastine

whooaa
Nice balance, good use of as few words as possible and well expressed. Hope to hear more, soon.

( Posted by: ogg [Member] On: August 7, 2003 )

Dungeon:
Expressed so that it isn't overflowing. Nicely done. I liked your message and theme. Rhythm too. I rate it a 10/10.
~Thanks for commenting on my piece "Forever Gone". I was going for sad to anger ratio. I know someone who felt like that when she lost her boyfriend. So I tried to describe her feelings in poetry~

( Posted by: Cryptic Rapture [Member] On: November 24, 2003 )





Add Your Comment

You Must be a member to post comments and ratings. If you are NOT already a member, signup now it only takes a few seconds!

All Fields are required

Commenting Guidelines:
  • All comments must be about the writing. Non-related comments will be deleted.
  • Flaming, derogatory or messages attacking other members well be deleted.
  • Adult/Sexual comments or messages will be deleted.
  • All subjects MUST be PG. No cursing in subjects.
  • All comments must follow the sites posting guidelines.
The purpose of commenting on Lit.Org is to help writers improve their writing. Please post constructive feedback to help the author improve their work.


Username:
Password:
Subject:
Comment:





Login:
Password: