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An attempt at Iambic Pentameter for my poetry workshop. Go ahead, check the syllables! Yes, it's pretty fucking stupid, but then so is Iambic Pentameter. But I publish these things because somewhere, somewhere, somewhere, there's always someone who'll like them no matter if they suck to me. It's not really my decision to make once it's out there. Liberating in a way.

Andrew Poff
September 9th, 2008
Poetry Workshop
Iambic Pentameter

Plea of the Letch

It might be true there’s sex in all I do.


I am a primate after all, evolved


But still restrained to function, form and gut


And logic based evaluation of


Potential splicing exploits every tick


Of every clock and every circumstance.


So leave me to my lusting for I’m just


A man and do what men do. Your ideas,


Philosophies do nothing for my gut!


There’s food in my small belly, lust in my


Big heart and everywhere are they with hair


And dressing for my choosing, Waiting prim


And proper, prostrate, staring into me.



Convention tortures me—inefficiency.


so shred the lines for opportunity.

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Siredwinsantos@gmail.com


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The following comments are for "Plea of the Letch"
by SirEdwinSantos

Eros in Iambs
Given the lively debate proceeding up on 'Rants' about the merits of poetic formulae, I thought someone ought to acknowlege one of its rare appearances down on 'Poetry'. I've never felt moved to try Iambic Pentameter, so I'm fairly ill-qualified to critique it. But to my ear, your first 3 lines are very good: perfect rhythmically as well as mathematically. After that I lose the rhythm a couple of times as the sentences become uncomfortably constrained by form. Still, it's not a bad poem, and this is a whole lot harder than it looks!

What would really be interesting would be to see the same poem - or same theme, anyway - written free-form, and compare the two. Well, I'd be interested anyway. I'm dorky like that.

( Posted by: mobiussoul [Member] On: September 24, 2008 )

deviations
Yeah, there are a couple of deviations there, but we're doing the Shakespearian thing so... Luckily that's all over as soon as I turn in a couple quatrains. I don't have any interest in writing this one free form... I just don't really hold on to any one idea for that long, especially when it makes it to the page. But read my other stuff if you'd like and feast on it's unrestrained succulence... jk. but please do. ;-) peace.

( Posted by: siredwinsantos [Member] On: September 24, 2008 )





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