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Inadequate is just the word
The feeling is much more absurd
A glassed-in pit with sheer, clear walls
The voice of reason faintly calls

I cannot hear what's being said
The silent echoes fill my head
An observation tank of jeers
My legs collapse and the crowd cheers

A rarity of specimen
With ample paper and no pen
I feel misplaced, abandoned, cold
I hope I die before I'm old

I sense that I am being watched
Recorded, every job I've botched
I'm tired of the scrutiny
I long to commit mutiny

I cry and pound and scream and kick
My efforts only make me sick
Where should I turn? Whom should I trust?
This rain of salt begets my rust

Alone and made of solid steel
I cannot love or hate or feel
But is this life as it should be?
Is pain what truly sets us free?

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The following comments are for "Tinman Blues"
by desconocida

Tinman Blues
I enjoyed reading this poem very much. I sence that you feel everything deeply.That when you love something or some one it is the from the deepest part of you that it is felt.On the other hand when you don't like something or some one that is felt with just as much intensity.I thought it was very good and look forward to reading more of what you have written..My Best..Lorraine

( Posted by: Lorraine [Member] On: May 2, 2004 )

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