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Goodwill #1
8/22/08

I arrive and
4X4
8 Re-uped Gaylords wait
for compression in
the growling thing
of inch thick steel
and sometimes 2

I like the dust
I like toe cacophony of old
and discarded
and dry

Quack, quack, like quacking
behind me
resounds fat, black, male
autism, it says
over and over
something about "burning trash"

He totes a can
and he's like
slow pneumatics
relentless

Imagine my frustration
Wondering
Where in his smothered mind lies
these long yellow fields
of burning
pulsing
trash


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Siredwinsantos@gmail.com


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by SirEdwinSantos

pulsing trash
you don't so much write poems as you do create landscapes. you do this very well, and this piece is no exception. there's disgust and despair in equal measure here, as the garbage, both literal and moral, both inanimate and human is displayed with dystopian skill… good to read you again.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: August 31, 2008 )

poewhit
trash dumps-a lot of them around

( Posted by: poewhit [Member] On: September 3, 2008 )

Dystopia
Ha, I guess dystopia is what it's all about! ;-)

( Posted by: siredwinsantos [Member] On: September 3, 2008 )





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