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In high school I wrote a poem. 
I’m sure it was for you - 
           the  
 
infamous, anonymous you. 
Lines of unbearable 
             
 
;    (unbearably) 
rhyming torment scribbled on margins 
of bulk-bought, college-ruled looseleaf. 
 
A poem for every page.

 
 
My words flowed 
      jagged 
stuttering 
     out 
emotions 
that even still have not been named. 
Decorated with sketches and doodles. 
Great artistic outflow that was  
continually more important 
than the repetitive drone of disinterested curricula. 
 
And then there was you - 
       there was always you 
       there was only you 
             
 
;   the infamous, anonymous you. 
My blinkered muse.

 
 
Your talons in my heart 
held steady on my pen 
Until my words were 
          no 
             
 
;   longer 
             
 
;           &nbs 
 
p; my 
             
 
;           &nbs 
 
p;        own. 
My identity  
transformed 
       (mutated) 
by a shadow in your eye.

 
 
An existence based on you - 
         the infinite,  
 
anonymous you.

 



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The following comments are for "10 Poems and a Piece of Black and White Art"
by RainbowGyrl

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drat. html... this is supposed to be spaced much differently. I'll fix it tomorrow.

( Posted by: RainbowGyrl [Member] On: March 15, 2003 )

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RainbowGyrl,

Very interesting piece here. I liked it alot. It flowed nicely, and reminded me alot or my first poetry writing. :) Good stuff, hope to see more of your writing soon.

Later,
Dras

( Posted by: Drastine [Member] On: March 15, 2003 )

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I'm having serious issues with the form of this piece. It's integral to it's rhythm. However, spending another afternoon formatting HTML for a poem that I wrote two years ago is not what I have time to do these days :/

( Posted by: RainbowGyrl [Member] On: March 18, 2003 )

rainbow
RainbowGyrl - just a word of advice on trying to force HTML to format unusually spaced text properly: Don't.
Just enclose the whole thing in a set of <pre> tags. It may make it come out in an ugly font, but at least it will format with all the spacing you want.
(that's how they used to do a lot of HTML formatting in the days before Netscape invented tables)

( Posted by: Spudley [Member] On: March 18, 2003 )

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Spudly, that's what I usually do but I thought I'd do thing the hard way this time.

( Posted by: RainbowGyrl [Member] On: March 18, 2003 )





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