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_Time Passed_

Somewhere, a clock ticked slowly;
A fire went out, and a man fell asleep.
Another sat on the stairs waiting for the world to end.
And time passed.

The slow time slowed down;
The clock hands shirked their destination.
Snow fell; the man waited for destruction,
And time passed.

The clock stopped in fear,
But the world was half way gone,
So the man continued waiting,
And time, despite the clock, passed.

The world ended with a whimper and a bang.
The clock vanished; all men ceased to exist.
The man on the stairs died while waiting,
But in the emptiness, time passed.

And God said: "Let time fall into oblivion,
For oblivion is timelessness,
And timelessness is oblivion."
And time passed away.

Spudley Strikes Again

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The following comments are for "Time Passed"
by Spudley

Apart from the bit about god I think it is great, although that bit does add a bit of comedy to it, well I think so anyway. Almost makes it seem like time is in control of everything, even god. The time passed away ending was quite effective. Though I do think line 3 may be too long, but I am not sure, see what you think. I f it doesn't break the rythm then its fine. A pleasure to read spudley.

( Posted by: [Member] On: March 13, 2003 )

Haunting. Good! Makes one think, past the self.

( Posted by: C.L. Mareydt [Member] On: May 12, 2003 )

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