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It sits dammed, damned
to my silence,
poem pre
worded,
felt as breeze on skin,
a summer stumble
without conceit.
I task at tasking
(a heart husbandry distracts me)
elsewhere and
it draws me back like a tide that swells
into mermaid song, liquid,
so I must
now
write
and be.

*

He said "I refuse to die
while you are in my heart"
and now I replay this
trickle
of rare and precious
that tell exactly
whence love emerges,
remains emergent.
Death
needs to be your lover, come
courting as execrable ills
upon your finite,
lower-case self
for you to say this
and not be afraid.
I am yours, too, infinitely.

*

Something sways and bows low
my inner gardens, a heartwind sudden
even while I ride my bike,
helmet a brain-barrack and shiny...
I'm not streamlined, wear peasant skirt
for cycling, have
a basketful of fresh-ground espresso,
chai leaves, flax & forbidden
cookies, glazed, all in brown paper.
And I could have bought cut flowers,
baguettes, wine bottles, but then,
I would have resembled
a calendar page
still life
so what-
calendar pages need deference too.

------
Of all known institutions, I attend only two: church, in my heart, and school, in yours. Both are subject to demolition. - Lucie Adams, 2007
It is only for poetry to know how many stanzas fit into one caress. - Lucie Adams, 2008


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The following comments are for "Isocele triptych"
by windchime

mermaid song
Very nice Lucy,

I particularly liked the imagery in the final section and the calender reference gave me a chuckle. It did trickle at the beginning gaining more momentum towards the end.

I liked the "...swell into mermaid song, liquid" line as well.

Good writings
smithy


( Posted by: smithy [Member] On: June 26, 2008 )

windchime's "calendar"
Ahh, a highly enjoyable piece worth waiting for..Good to read VOICE again..

Isn't it interesting how we transliterate..our takes perceived/processed from personal experience/enviroment..

Your offering, a trinity of sorts..with its movements..changing/evolving/transcending....'baguettes and wine'...offerings considered..'deferences'..Indeed.

One to return to..(mental note made)

Ciao,
Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: June 26, 2008 )

I Love Lucie!!!
To me your writing talks to me of a poet sitting down to write a poem being distracted from it , then brought back by a muse to finish...

We fight to stay alive for those we love...until we know all will be well with them and we can let go...

I can see you now as a Norman Rockwell painting...Peace and Love...Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: June 26, 2008 )

Lucie's "inner garden"...
This is beautiful. Lucie, I wish you well, and many wishes for good blessings to fill your life and those of your loved ones. It was good to read something by you again. As you know I rarely stop in here lately. I am wrapped up in my own personal affairs and my own health issues and upcoming operation and the horrid regime they are putting me through in the meanwhile, and my time is limited, and I come here and read when I can, I check my email, I check my social contacts from friends and relatives on myspace.com and that is about it...but I will never give up on the Lit.Org or the writers I have come to love and know so well...you being one of the best, THE BEST...but I know you would say, we are all the best and that is true, we are in a cosmic collective consciousness sense and spiritual one sense...but as a writer, I find you work exceptional. You never disappoint.

Be good to Lucie the caretaker, and take good care of her too.

Love,
your friend, and fan,
Lena

( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Admin] On: June 27, 2008 )

Right Angle...
Hey Windy...did u see me at the festival??? I was wearing a long green and white feather boa and tin foil underpants???? I was the one handing out animal balloon condoms????Ah well...next time my sweet...when the moon is ripe and dripping with sweat I shall appear like a vision of Hercules...just me and my tin foil underpants....

I love this poemmmmmm by the way...."Something sways and bows low" indeed Lucie...

( Posted by: kilgoretrout [Member] On: June 27, 2008 )

Thanking 7 people
Francisco, projectile commenting always welcome especially, as right here right now, when your comment opens my eyes to possibilities I never thought of...You're a great reader, you let the poem find you, and maybe that's why you see things so well.

Smithy, yes, you're right: one of my most long-lived weaknesses is texture flaws. Thanks for pointing this out.

Bobby, yes, our takes are always at least once removed, aren't they?
1- take an isocele triange
2- way up the sides, draw a line, inside the triangle, parallel to its base
3- at the points of intersection of this new line, draw two perpendiculars down to the base
4- fold triangle along these perpendiculars.
5- triptych now has its middle panel shaped like an upward-pointing arrow (love & death under heavens)

Kacee! I love Norman Rockwell! Life's distractions are its very attractions, though, and it's sometimes difficult to live in the moment, but you get it. Fighting to stay alive is what everybody wants to do...

Eric, I am indeed confronting my own thoughts. There won't be much more terminal illness poetry appearing here as I am about to change jobs.

Lena, in the first place, Shannon is the best and you know it!!! Kidding aside, you're right, we all want to be the best we can be, I guess, and I'm thankful for the opportunity to do that here, and to rub elbows with a true artist like you! I'm thankful for you as my friend. Sent you an email today.

Terence, I saw a tatto walking away by itself last night when the music muted...I was afraid it might have been you but then thought it might have been me: tattoos elude me...Oh well. there will be other festivals. Although I can think of myriad uses for snake-shaped animal balloon condoms, I fear I would have little use for a prairie bison animal shaped condom, but I'm sure this is only a transitory reluctance...You are very brave wearing tinfoil underpants: if it were me, I would be terrified of becoming...fried green tomatoes...Nice to see you haven't picked up and gone yet. Hope you're here for a little while anyway. Look forward to reading you.

Thank you all for stopping by, reading, and taking the time.

Lucie

( Posted by: windchime [Member] On: June 27, 2008 )

"heart husbandry"
I am coming to this late, and will now proceed to deface your post and embarrass myself with my missing-the-point blather, but:

loved “heart husbandry”, initially it reminded me of your “do compassion callisthenics”, from “Morning, broken and passed around” [a favourite of mine], but when I thought about I realised the two things couldn’t have been less alike… “heart husbandry” is manual labour, is working fingers to bone to ensure something will grow… “compassion callisthenics” are spiritual labour, is working to ensure something stays back, heart stays soft… [maybe one is indeed “tasking”, while the other is tending?] the one, I guess, could be preparation for the other, the “compassion callisthenics” breaking ground for “heart husbandry”… maybe… but all these labours of heart and soul are leading to place where poem is induced… as opposed to produced, I think… both, I think are preparations for poem’s prenatal soul, and that which distracts, the everyday life stuff, is also that which informs and creates. trick is finding space for expression not too within or too without, just with… that’s what occurred to me anyway… I know what I mean, hope you do too…

everything about second “side” I loved, loved “I am yours, too, infinitely”, suspect that this is akin to we are all ours, too, infinitely, or, we are all each other’s infinitely... which is pretty amazing stuff… second “side” has transcendence throughout as first had imminence at centre… awesome, Lucie, genuinely, the key to which is the voice, the key is sharing and being shared, I think…

third is steeped in accelerant and speeds along gathering poetic momentum, the words and images create a “now” … a lasting “now… a living “now”… a forever “now”… and that’s what calendars do, isn’t it? or at leas how the function as poetry? …

think this now is worthy, Lucie, not just of deference, but of reverence. it is a beautiful thing, this, and I apologise for my over-caffeinated, under-medicated rambling commentary…

was moved, by this. thank you.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: June 29, 2008 )

Lucie's "calendar"
Lucie-
Mental note recalled...

Hope this finds you imagining...

Looking up,
Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: September 14, 2008 )

Dear Dear Lucie,
How is it that I pushed myself away from wonders like this..

I have missed so much but in only reading one more of your Poetic stories, I am filled to the max with ideas, picturesque moments, envisioning you on your bike, laughing when I see you stop and get off, taking off your Shell to reveal "Helmet Head" LOL......

The serious, the jovial, however subtle, it's always there to remind us not to take life so seriously as to forget to pick up and smell that single flower.

Your way with words is magical, in the sense that I use almost all my senses as I read. What a wonderful way of sharing Lucie, thank you for this window into your world, once more.

Content that life goes on.

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: September 26, 2008 )





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