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I tossed a sharp rock, and
hit a good friend in the head nerf blood. As kids,
we played - we played rough; and we lied;
we lied rough. My friend collapsed to the ground, bleeding.

I wasn't home, he did it! She said it; they cried
while I whined and hid beneath my playground half-truth.

Age concealed history - and history relegated truth
to the back of my mind. Who had I trampled while growing old?
The rock won't remember, but Ill never forget.


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The following comments are for "Childhood Stitches"
by ak7raplt

spectacular
Wow. That was a fantastic piece of poetry. It hits you right between the eyes (if you'll pardon the pun), and paints such a vivid image that I could almost have been there.
And a strong ending too.
Score 9/10.

( Posted by: Spudley [Member] On: March 7, 2003 )

great poem
I love the flow of this poem; it rings so true. Nerf blood- my favourite. One question, is it "cancels" or "conceals"?

( Posted by: desconocida [Member] On: March 7, 2003 )

egads-
ugh, an error. it should be conceals; thank you both for your comments! I'm glad it came out strong - this is a true event.

re: errors: "you" and the end is incorrect as well. I should resubmit this piece, errors aren't good!

ak!plt

( Posted by: ak7raplt [Member] On: March 8, 2003 )





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