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_I'll Be Fine_

It's not steep: Not really a mountain at all.
The air's a little thin, but my pack is light:
I'll be fine.

A beautiful view: Sweeping valleys, scattered rocks.
A bit breathless - must be lunch time.
I'll take a break.

So peaceful: Here, I'm on top of the world.
I'll just sit on this rock for a moment.
I'm tired.

Fluffy. Those clouds were so pretty down there.
But now they've crept up the hill.
I'm cold.

Don't panic: Remember, just stick to the path.
But suddenly the path is gone.
I'm lost.

Time? How long till it starts getting dark?
Its going to be a cold night tonight.
I'm afraid.

Help! Will I be missed? Will I be found?
The cloud blocks all vision.
I'm alone.

Shivering. Nothing between me and the cloud
Except my icy-wet clothes.
I'm tired.
I'm cold.
I'm lost.
I'm afraid.
I'm alone.

A clear morning brings the barking of dogs.
And voices: "Are you alright?" they ask.
"I'll be fine."

Spudley Strikes Again

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The following comments are for "I'll Be Fine"
by Spudley

Well, it's nice piece of poetry, my friend.I felt it was more like a story rather than poetry.

It's nice that you can compose poems that has the feeling of a story or a particular incident.

Keep up the good work and I hope to rad more.

( Posted by: g.s.vasukumar [Member] On: March 3, 2003 )

Hey there Spudley,
Really liked the structer of your poem.Could feel cold,fear and growing panic towards the end.
I wonder, was this poem based on personal experience or is it something else?


( Posted by: sinner [Member] On: March 3, 2003 )

Pretty Good. I enjoyed reading it. It was very interesting to me. It was a catchy poem that I ust agree seemed more like your teling a story. But I liked the way it was written. Real Nice.


( Posted by: Carmel Brown66 [Member] On: March 12, 2003 )

I like it, however much it sounds a little like a story it is still quite distinctively a poem and a good one at that.

I like the way it takes you through feeling fine through to concern, worry then being scared and finally the relief and then the calm again. The poem seems to pass these emotions over very weel, good work.

( Posted by: [Member] On: March 13, 2003 )

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