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A/N: With heartfelt apologies to the people here who know what they are doing with this genre, namely williamhill, Penelope, AuldMiseryGuts and poeteye,(and whomever else I forgot) and with deep gratitude to NitzKitty who just likes to have fun with these, I'm gonna soak one big toe in this form too and make an ass of myself in the process: this place wouldn't be this place without such behaviour...;-)


I'm told that nothing rhymes with "orange"
And not much rhymes with any fruit:
When you build your poem, it's hang or hinge.

But whether you choose to starve or binge
On rhymes galore, that point is moot:
I'm told that nothing rhymes with "orange".

I'm no rhyming poet and readers cringe.
They wish I'd take a different route:
When you build your poem, it's hang or hinge.

Passion's metaphor doesn't smoke or singe:
It burns deep red sure as Cupids are cute...
I'm told that nothing rhymes with "orange".

Whether slightly warm or hottest tinge,
Whether cornucopia or delicate flute,
When you build your poem, it's hang or hinge.

You trope it up with lace or fringe
While planting your tender poesy shoot.
When you build your poem, it's hang or hinge:
I'm told than nothing rhymes with "orange".


------
Of all known institutions, I attend only two: church, in my heart, and school, in yours. Both are subject to demolition. - Lucie Adams, 2007
It is only for poetry to know how many stanzas fit into one caress. - Lucie Adams, 2008


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The following comments are for "Unworthy wordy villanelle"
by windchime

Or-an-ge
Lucie,
This is completely wonderful...I'm just a big goof off where villanelles are concerned...The court jester of the kingdom of Lit...You and the rest are the true artists...Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: February 4, 2008 )

Organge...
Well Orange you the smart one! I know it's been a while but I just thought that I'd peep in just to see how you where doing and here you are...Doing what you do best! (well at least to my knowledge)!!!LOL I miss you Windchime! You have a beautiful way of pronouncing your intellect...It's a pleasure, joy and a stimulus to live inside of your thoughts!

I have missed your comments and bold taste for words...I've been busy but I'll be back soon to drop a few lines on the poetry board...in the meantime I'll just peep in and out on you and many other's trhat have snacthed my ear.

take care love,
OH>>>>>>>>>>>>>and HAPPY NEW YEAR to you and yours!

always the student...
LMJ

( Posted by: LMJ [Member] On: February 5, 2008 )

the trouble with orange
things I have "rhymed" with Orange ;)

Porridge
Image
Stonehenge
Forage
Binge
Syringe
Revenge

but that's quite enough of that. Lucie, I admire anybody who attempts a villanelle. it took me years to work up the poetic savvy to write mine, and you present yours with much more aplomb… poems about poetry are tricky to pull off, villanelles more so. you write a witty poem with musing tone that retains your own style. a hat-trick, that is. and definitely worthy. the best to you.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: February 5, 2008 )

oranges poranges
Of oranges and poranges
One is true and one is not
Weedling for the foranges
Is just a simple polyglot


Sorry I'm a little late reading this one. I love your wit. The thing to which you need not apologize is your love of words. I have read your other pieces and enjoyed them without commenting. You do turn a phrase and thank you for that.
Ken

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: February 18, 2008 )

Very late thanking 7
Please everyone accept my apologies for not acknowledging your precious feedback to me until now...I have had and continue to have real life concerns which keep me away from here.

Let me say first of all that I find rhyming in English difficult, much more difficult than rhyming in French, and that will probably always be so. But I do love a challenge, and this place certainly provides grounds for challenges!

Also, I live in Quebec, and francophone quebeckers are notorious for one thing when they speak English with their accent. They always drop the initial "h" in words, or they add one where there is none. And the best example of this is the following:

"'E drop de 'ockey puck on center hice"

(which addresses, also, our national sport)

which is the idea behind my second repeating line: if you drop the "h" from "hinge", it actually rhymes with "orange".

Eric, that was the whole point, was to avoid half-rhymes, and I tried, God knows I tried! But I still do a lot of grappling with your English language, though I try not to show it here...

Kacee, wish I were half the goof you are! I wanted to spoof the villanelle, because I can't write the damn things at all, and will never measure up to the villanelle artistry of those mentioned in my author's note. Maybe I am an artist, Kacee, but not a villanelle artist, not by a long shot!

LaShea! God, I never thought I'd see you here again, and I'm so sorry I missed you in real time when you dropped by! Will be looking for your unique and extraordinary voice here, for sure! I'm so sorry you had to see this, rather than my "real" work...But I'm very happy you enjoyed it!

Francisco, I have this idea that a villanelle-writing poet needs to become the villanelle he/she writes, and I could never quite get there...All I ever could do was manufacture the thing as an onlooker...

Shannon, Inasmuch as anything non-descriptive is not villanelle-suited, then no, a poem about poetry doesn't belong as a villanelle. You're the only one here, though, who manages villanelle as narrative, so don't be hiding behind curtains, my friend. In fact, let's have another narrative villanelle!

Pen, thank YOU for your patience and tolerance with this read! You know, I don't think it's only about finding something suitable in villanelle rhyme, I think it's about finding something exactly right. That's the difficulty. In sestinas, I find I can fart around with almost anything. Not so in villanelles...They are far more demanding. I opted for demanding form as well as demanding (said to be impossible) rhyme, and this was meant as a spoof, more a spoof of me than anything else. I did announce that I was going to make an ass of myself. I thought I had...:-(

Ken, so happy you appreciated! Will try very hard to return here to read and comment soon, and I owe you comments, too!

Many many thanks to all for enduring this!
And me...

Lucie

( Posted by: windchime [Member] On: February 19, 2008 )

:)
Oranges, peaches and all the nice things
Doesnt have to ryhme to make this girl smile
loved the poem. Cute , like eating a perfectly made tart with strawberries....few people have mastered that art.:)
Keep writing
Id like to hear a poem on knickers, u can tell so much fro a person about what kind of knickers they wear...but then again thats my fetish.:P
thank you for the commment

( Posted by: shaza89 [Member] On: March 7, 2008 )





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