What She Said and Didn't Say
by brickhouse (Member) - published: November 19, 2006
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I told her to trust in my judgment
She said if there was one thing
One thing she could trust in
It would be my judgment

I told her I believed—that we kept going
On after death
She said no—this is it
Now what will you do?

I told her I could be nice
She said it’s a mean place
I told her I was unsure
She said I know

I decided I knew
Not very much
Not much at all
I began to learn

She taught me everything
And said it’s nothing
She said it was going to be rough going
And offered me a free ride

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"Be on my side, I'll be on your side. There is no reason for us to hide." --Neil Young

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The following comments are for "What She Said and Didn't Say"
by brickhouse

Nice to have you back
Good to see you here again, Brickhouse! I hope you're back for a good long spell.

Loved the first and last stanzas, but I'm not sure I understand the poem. And I'm not sure whether I prefer it that way.

( Posted by: viper9 [Member] On: November 20, 2006 )

It's good to be missed
Thanks for taking the time to have a look, Viper. No, I can only pop in on occasion. I am consumed with teaching at the moment, at last. There are lots of unfinished symphonies lying around but they will have to wait. It would be nice, however, to see what some of the old Lit.org gang are up to these days. Writing some fine stuff, is my guess. The first and last stanzas? I really like the first three the most.

( Posted by: brickhouse [Member] On: November 20, 2006 )

what she said
You let her activate the button to get the free ride going. You trusted her judgment. It got you her body of knowledge.

But is she riding with you, or has she merely pushed the bucket you're in to the front of the roller coaster?

Liked very much the matter-of-factness of this. Liked how this goes back and forth: a spare-worded tête-à-tête that leaves me wanting a sequel to this...

Thank you for posting it.

( Posted by: windchime [Member] On: November 23, 2006 )

For windchime
It is not really for me to kiss and tell, but let's say my cage has been rattled. Can you feel the vibrations?

( Posted by: brickhouse [Member] On: January 18, 2007 )

how have i never read anything by you
i have to admitt i was a little bored by the first stanza, but just the right amount of intriged to keep reading. and then be completely blown away by the last stanza.
i'm guess you haven't, but if you're thinking about it, don't change anything. this poem is the right balance of simple and mysterious.

ps. Neil Young? hell yes.

( Posted by: ruina [Member] On: July 27, 2008 )

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