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and save the whole file under the name myself
most dreaded most feared
of all the lingering evils
too lazy to corrupt but talented sinner

each collection of words like morning rush hour
flowing, crowded together each anonymous sentiment
uncomfortable, focused elsewhere

the mind numbs from too many yous
and lack of ambition, too much time
curiously also not enough

to explore the reaches of lethargy
hungry for a reward when one gets there
the place which is physical
and full of excuses for the self and all of it.


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I'd rather have permanent employment than be called fascinating


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The following comments are for "vague seeing"
by wrdekle

vague seeing
My goodness, I don't why you haven't had any other comments. I love the meaning of this prose. It may need a bit of restructuring from my POV, but the words had profundity and it made me realize that I'm not alone in feeling the same way.

Thank you, wrdkle

( Posted by: eleda [Member] On: November 23, 2005 )

vague seeing
I like how everything runs together image into image here, from information systems imagery to morality and religion, to language, to intellect, and it all ends with no resolve, stays inside its own ambiguity, even in the gratification alluded to in the final stanza. This is great! Because the expression of the "truth of no boundaries" is difficult to "poetize", and you've done it...Choosing to evoke rather than organize is a bold move. Thank you for this piece which lights up strobelike. Very satisfying.

Lucie

( Posted by: windchime [Member] On: November 23, 2005 )





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