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Naked
Twisting
I see you
seated above me
Natural beauty
you smile
And you bend
I feel you
Body on body, flesh on flesh
You kiss me
And rise
My eyes, shut in pleasure, now open
I see the stain
on your perfect body
the blood
My blood
spread on your uncovered form
trickling from my wound
and you smile.

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http://hernameisomega.wordpress.com


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The following comments are for "Romance and bloodstains (part the second)"
by JonnyT

Romance
Man, the first thing that came to mind was Vampire. A little too much teeth, but hey, it sounds like everyone turned out happy. My curious little mind wonders exactly where that blood came from. lol.

( Posted by: Concept [Member] On: October 13, 2004 )

Romance
Yeah me too? You can't just leave us hanging can you? This is good, very interesting and creative.

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: October 13, 2004 )

can't exactly explain, but...
this poem is inspired by a dream I had a bit ago, explained at http://www.livejournal.com/users/jpmthompson/6955.html (content warning, linked text would NOT be acceptable as a post here - sexual content).

Jonathan.

( Posted by: JonnyT [Member] On: October 15, 2004 )





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