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Come, wayward stranger, towards me.

Let us confirm mythologies of love expiration dates.
It's as hard as my rhythmic illusions
Of cigarette-like dreams, weaved in my nightmares:
Explosive and ready to burn painfully
For art's sake.

Take for example the twitching of tongues,
Strained souls feeding on afternoon raptures
Escalating to heights unimaginable but reached,
Forgetting time;
Taking for granted the dim light in the darkness.

Picturesque maroon emotions displayed explicitly
Shameless because hopes are futile at this time of day.
I detest that, but you groaned, spit and spite;
Convulsions, repulsive, finished.

Breathing kerchieves are useless, Sweet Sigh,
To unstain your wicked infidelities;
Out of breath from sinning too many sins.

No options to pause
Or relish
Death.



------
rbs


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The following comments are for "Come"
by Lasher

mysterious title
Hi Lasher,

I find the subject matter heavy, deep and quite cryptic. What strikes me most is the opening line itself: the persona, like a candle light attracts the stranger as a hapless moth into the fire; speaks pathos in the fifth stanza and consumes him (stranger) in the end.

This poetry is controversial, perhaps, on the usage of words, form and descriptiveness.

Why the title, by the way? Please enlighten us your thoughts on this piece. Thanks!

Idomis

( Posted by: idomis [Member] On: August 30, 2004 )

uhm...
i dont have any other idea on what to put as a title for this...

( Posted by: lasher [Member] On: September 1, 2004 )

Nice
I really enjoyed this. It so reminds me of stuff that I would write. I really liked the 3rd stanza in particular. The first line is a little different, because I am trying to picture maroon and all I can think of is mudslides at Woodstock 2000. The second line, really brought back memories from 1998, whoa!The title is fine. Sometimes you have those poems. Good work, keep it up. :)

( Posted by: xinerama [Member] On: November 29, 2004 )





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